Lines Notes 2.8.08

Hi Cast!!

Much better job today. We are closer to where we need to be but not quite. Continue to look over old notes. Now it is just a matter of getting the words down and saying and doing as close as possible to the same thing from here on out for each show. This will increase your confidence and help keep the show moving and allow you to work in some speaking flavor!!

Note which comments are repeats from this week! Thanks to those of you who have put time into this! (It is really obvious as to who worked on lines and who didn’t use the notes!)

Michael: 10: six MONTHS not weeks!

Rose: 14: Mixed up lines about fish from DB. Look at order of these.

Kate: 25: “But the same bubbly, laughing, happy Bernie”

Agnes: 32: “There must be some reason why it overheats”

ALL: 34: Look at this page. The most important thing here is keeping it moving but still
know what you say and when you say it. We lost the first two lines on this page.

Maggie: 35: “In the garden” NOT “at the bend in the lane”— that is earlier. Know which
is which.

Gerry: 37: look at the one-liners with Chrissie. They were out of order and some were incorrect!

Gerry: 38: “Never been busier”

Gerry: 39: look at order of sentences when you talk about the bicycle

Gerry: 40: “Go ahead and mock…” you always forget this.
Look at paragraph beginning w/ “unbelievable” through to “Look! A single magpie!” you’ve had it right before but it was not right today.

Kate: 45: your line “If you knew your prayers…” MUST match Maggie’s on pg. 48 b/c she mimics you. So be esp. careful with the wording on this one.

Kate: 46: “whatever he means by that Maggie.” We miss this one every time

Jack: 48-50: continue to look at wording. Much better that yesterday! Thank you!!

Maggie: 51: “We’re all in the same boat Jack. We’re hoping that….”

Michael: 52: look at wording in monologues. Some have to be specific. It reads better to say the scripted “home” instead of “house”
Watch “left forever” you have been saying “be gone forever” or something and it is not making sense (that was very picky, excellent job on monologues today!!!—best yet!!)

Jack: 57: look where you describe walk #4. this was a little mixed up

Jack: 58: “Perhaps I’ll start next Monday”
You need to make sure you include that Obi is the goddess of the Earth b/c this explains why you pray to her for good crops

Jack: 59: Continue to look at wording for this monologue.

Kate: 61: “This must be kept…”

Chris and Gerry: look at pg. 61. Get it!

Gerry: 62: left out the explosives part
Look at the long paragraph at the bottom of this page. Get it! Some parts were out of order and you skipped a little bit

Chris: 77: “I wonder where Michael’s got to?”

Gerry: 79: “Let’s take off the back and see what’s what”


I am aware that some of these notes are extremely picky and minor. Please do not be offended or annoyed. I am of course not expecting perfection but am trying to give you the tools to deliver your lines in the most effective manner, which is the way that they were written. Now it is up to you to take the last step and use what I have given you to make your speech go from good to superior.

Thank you so much for all of your hard work! Please call me if you have any questions, I’ll be happy to help in any way that I can.

Thanks,

Dan